I'm going to put the blurb for my novel up, and I would really appreciate some serious suggestions.
"Winston is a contemplative, unambitious young boy who begins his search for love in the summer of 1937. Circumstances lead him to Sarah, whose determination to please her father make her more and more like him every day. Their romance is brief and inevitably interrupted by overseas conflict.
Separated, their lives go on; Sarah's under the watchful eyes of her plotting family and friends, and Winston's as a prinsoner of the Japanese. They are not only faced with the loss of their freedom, they must also defeat the trechery of their own emotions. Eventually they are forced to choose between a dream and reality."
badly written blurb. i know.